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写了篇短文 请好心人帮忙看一下语法错误 下个礼拜要在班里面讲了

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Good afternoon everyone, today our group will introduce some Mangas for you.
I want to share "BulletTheory" with you, which is adapted from a popular reasoning PSP game.
It may be very different from what my teammates will introduce then.
And as a manga relating to death, some people ridiculed it because the color of the blood isstrange.
But it is still agreat work. The background of the story is a private school called Peak of hope.
The school aims to train the world first-class high school students.
Our leading character,Naegi Makoto, with other fifteen students who are adept at different areas, takes the entrance ceremony in full anticipation, but just at that time, a teddy bear who claims to be the headmaster of the school turns up.
It says “once you're in, you're in.”
All the exits are totally locked,and the only way to go outside is killing each other without being found.
In that way, the students begin falling into desperation.
如果能润色一下更好了。TAT


IP属地:浙江1楼2014-05-11 13:20回复
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    IP属地:浙江2楼2014-05-11 13:22
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      IP属地:浙江3楼2014-05-11 13:41
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        takes the entrance …… anticipation是什么语法?


        IP属地:北京来自Android客户端4楼2014-05-11 13:59
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          顶o(≥v≤)o


          来自Android客户端5楼2014-05-11 14:09
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