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Hello, my name is Wang Huaifu. I am 18 years old this year, is a high school student. I am from grade 1 middle school Jieshou City. I hope that I can join your school.
有错的需要改的吗? 急


IP属地:安徽来自Android客户端1楼2015-12-10 12:56回复
    去掉第二个is


    IP属地:北京来自iPhone客户端2楼2015-12-10 12:59
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      中式英语,最好用高级句势把句子拉长,如果是书面语,hello显得不正式。


      来自iPhone客户端4楼2015-12-10 13:01
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        去掉this year,a high school student from xxx 学校


        来自WindowsPhone客户端5楼2015-12-10 13:06
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          !!!


          IP属地:安徽来自Android客户端6楼2015-12-10 13:07
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